tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post5013063617559038375..comments2023-10-18T08:54:01.163-03:00Comments on A Piece of My Mind: Weekend Writer's Retreat - 18Julia Phillips Smithhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15392455413201190775noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post-46213029619674175202010-08-01T22:10:40.935-03:002010-08-01T22:10:40.935-03:00THAT was a brilliant piece of writing, Julia! Grea...THAT was a brilliant piece of writing, Julia! Great pacing - lots of questions raised - growth of Scorius as a man, no longer a boy - and some awesome turns of phrase:<br /><br />With all the bluster he could manage, Scorpius prodded the unsympathetic guard to help load the falconer into the cart, <b>whose feet dangled disgracefully over the sides.</b><br /><br />In the sunlight, the reality of the swelling mess of Richolf's face <b>clawed at the breath in Scorpius' chest.</b><br /><br /><b>A worm of dread pierced Scorpius' heart</b> at the mention of the murdered noble those three years past.<br /><br />His master drifted into oblivion, leaving Scorpius with the barking dogs, disturbing wounds to dress and the unwelcome answer to his question <b>from that long ago Night of the Cupboard.</b><br /><br />Brava, Julia, brava :)Janethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13297537075103893956noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post-52248643043585029862010-07-31T01:27:18.120-03:002010-07-31T01:27:18.120-03:00Great installment! I hope Richolf makes it. He s...Great installment! I hope Richolf makes it. He sounds pretty bad off. I can tell this is going to be a huge turning point for Scorpius, in terms of how he sees himself.Ann (bunnygirl)http://www.ampino.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post-76670666243083353722010-07-30T19:31:40.310-03:002010-07-30T19:31:40.310-03:00Very intriguing! :o) Happy Friday!Very intriguing! :o) Happy Friday!VaBookworm87https://www.blogger.com/profile/18317012517567013823noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post-82300195955625105622010-07-30T19:19:15.755-03:002010-07-30T19:19:15.755-03:00I'm still wondering about the particulars of t...I'm still wondering about the particulars of that murder, but I see why the dragon wasn't as scary.Alice Audreyhttp://www.aliceaudrey.com/?page_id=4029noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post-84130088745715903612010-07-30T17:35:17.643-03:002010-07-30T17:35:17.643-03:00another EXCELLENT segment. you certainly know how ...another EXCELLENT segment. you certainly know how to tell a good story.<br /><br />love those movie quotes a few posts down too. you chose some good ones and found a way for them to benefit everyday life. <br /><br />hope all is well. have a great day.Naquillityhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04784964201596357136noreply@blogger.com