tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post6437343362800373202..comments2023-10-18T08:54:01.163-03:00Comments on A Piece of My Mind: Weekend Writer's Retreat - 1Julia Phillips Smithhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15392455413201190775noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post-55470712533892698122010-04-10T18:57:07.071-03:002010-04-10T18:57:07.071-03:00You most certainly have packed in so much backgrou...You most certainly have packed in so much background about your character. And yet, managed to involve the reader in the tug of war of his emotions at the same time.<br /><br />I am new to all this genre writing and appreciated your description of flash. I have no idea what I write - but it is MUCH shorter than even yours. I may have to branch out in a while.Juliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09513648613788716017noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post-27955212635623247122010-04-07T15:53:45.511-03:002010-04-07T15:53:45.511-03:00That last line is very strong. Well done.
data en...That last line is very strong. Well done.<br /><a href="http://www.bpojobsathome.com" rel="nofollow"> data entry india </a>sanjeethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04043304632873778108noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post-91473745530309995632010-04-06T02:18:19.977-03:002010-04-06T02:18:19.977-03:00Nice character vignette, and good writing. I'...Nice character vignette, and good writing. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work!Ann (bunnygirl)http://ampfiction2.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post-29807485801794446262010-04-05T17:49:25.000-03:002010-04-05T17:49:25.000-03:00I'm already drawn into his story and would lov...I'm already drawn into his story and would love to know more.<br /><br />Thanks so much for joining the Weekend Writer's Retreat. This is a wonderful addition.Grandmahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10182296233823884179noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post-21241507647343600172010-04-05T17:25:47.707-03:002010-04-05T17:25:47.707-03:00Lovely imagery you've created here, I want to ...Lovely imagery you've created here, I want to know so much more about his story. Thanks for joining the Weekend Writer's RetreatCalico Crazyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02877107683027950258noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post-81295886132017300062010-04-04T16:50:15.475-03:002010-04-04T16:50:15.475-03:00Hey, when am I going to get to read this whole boo...Hey, when am I going to get to read this whole book??? :) I must find out more about Weekend Writer's Retreat. Sounds like a good way to share our WIP's! <br /><br />I really do like this book and would like to read the whole thing (and yup, the is the practical me talking!).<br /><br />LillyLilly Cainhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07959802879287513881noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post-56180028543327382542010-04-04T15:59:08.286-03:002010-04-04T15:59:08.286-03:00Excellent writing, Julia. I get a strong feel for...Excellent writing, Julia. I get a strong feel for the tug-of-war going on in young Scorpius's mind -- a strong sense of a coming of age journey looming ahead of him. I'm glad you're participating in Writer's Retreat!Thomma Lynhttp://www.thommalyngrindstaff.com/storiesnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post-82808361469721612312010-04-03T11:25:18.838-03:002010-04-03T11:25:18.838-03:00I like the third paragraph from the end. It is rid...I like the third paragraph from the end. It is riddled with the tug and anxiety of a frightening yet appealing relationship.Nessahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07779269921583131094noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post-68917569655659704742010-04-03T08:18:54.583-03:002010-04-03T08:18:54.583-03:00So glad you're doing Weekend Writer's Retr...So glad you're doing Weekend Writer's Retreat, Julia :)<br /><br />Great scene, you've given us a glimpse into the character and we can feel his angst about this new chapter in his life. Moving from the known to the unknown - wanting things to stay the same, but knowing they can not! And I love the little hint about a 'demon' - wondering how that will play out later on.<br /><br />Favorite line: <i>The rough boulders could cradle him.</i> Love the image!Janethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13297537075103893956noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post-45277947499425444692010-04-03T03:44:07.196-03:002010-04-03T03:44:07.196-03:00That last line is very strong. Well done.
Welcom...That last line is very strong. Well done.<br /><br />Welcome to the Retreat!Alice Audreyhttp://www.aliceaudrey.com/?page_id=4029noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2715650832746263882.post-289034259300247582010-04-02T22:39:59.790-03:002010-04-02T22:39:59.790-03:00You've packed quite a bit of insight into the ...You've packed quite a bit of insight into the character here. Nice job.Travis Codyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06192526507760146748noreply@blogger.com