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Sunday, June 28, 2009
Poetry Train Monday - 107 - Squandered
Continuing on with my year of found poetry, this is a short piece of prose fiction that I wrote as an exercise when I belonged to a writer's group in Yarmouth. I've reworked it here as a poem.
Ride the Poetry Train!
Squandered
Terry glanced down
At the worn felt
Yellow, purple, blue monster sitting
On his right hand
Tusks bent for lack of stuffing
Terry had a sudden
Stabbing memory
An especially windy street performance
Wonky torn from his hand and Bill
Had actually chased the puppet
Into traffic
Nearly getting crushed
In the process
He returned with a
Drippy Wonky
Terry had felt
A ridiculous urge to
Hug Bill
For his heroism
Thank God
Bill would have thought
It was just
Terry's creative personality
Effusing over
Normal social boundaries
Terry had often
Wondered
How he'd ever been
Friends
With such a
Conservative straight arrow like
Bill
Or how Bill managed
To religiously meet with Terry
For workshop sessions
Bill the editor
To Terry's throw-another-one-out-there style
He supposed
Those afternoons
Were Bill's only forum for
Creativity
He tried to take it
From the top
One more time
The old routines
Were not
What he was
Looking for
It was hard
To shake himself up
To natter to thin air
How was he to
Bounce things
Off himself?
He supposed he'd have to learn how
Bill was gone
Bill was dead
Now
All he had left
Was a schizophrenic puppet
Who had holes for an identity
Wonky was trying his best
Wasn't he?
But all his ideas
Were duds
- Julia Smith - June 28, 2009 - original text 2001
Anthony North says This can be slightly disturbing in places.
Shelley Munro says I always enjoy your poems, Julia.
This can be slightly disturbing in places. Excellently done.
ReplyDeleteI always enjoy your poems, Julia. Well done.
ReplyDeleteAnthony - I found a whole other subtext in this piece when I rearranged it.
ReplyDeleteShelley - Thanks!
This part resonated with me "It was hard
ReplyDeleteTo shake himself up
To natter to thin air
How was he to
Bounce things
Off himself?"
This is actually very disturbing, as Terry comes off as a child at first. Doesn't mean it's not cool, though. Just ... not what I was expecting.
ReplyDeleteNara - Everybody needs a brainstorming buddy, I think.
ReplyDeleteSusan - Terry could be construed as several different sorts of people. I like to leave it up to the reader as to who he is.
Wow. This poem really packs a punch, Julia. Wonderful job.
ReplyDeleteI like poems which disturb me. Becos those make me think.
ReplyDeletethe sun danced around him and he kissed the stars