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Last week we were introduced to Dark Ages Welsh warrior Peredur, the hero of my debut vampire novel, SAINT SANGUINUS.
This week we meet Tanwen, the woman whose name was on his lips as he lay wounded on the battlefield.
After the wise woman purchases a ring from a peddler, her son Cavan returns the ring to Tanwen. Everyone in the village knows it belonged to Peredur.
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New tears began.
“I can’t,” she said.
Cavan pressed his mouth like a kiss near her ear. “Yes, you can,” he whispered.
Tanwen squeezed the ring in her hand until the edges bit. She took a deep breath, nodded and covered the rest of the space between herself and her home.
Tender and poignant moment. Well done, Julia.
ReplyDeleteAn emotionally tense six. Nice. :)
ReplyDeleteVery touching. Nice six!
ReplyDeleteHey Julia, just wanted to let you know the TBR blurb fest runs through tonight, so you're welcome to post! The next one's 2/19, for Romance. Thanks for participating!
ReplyDeletepoignant scene!
ReplyDeleteAh, what a sad six.
ReplyDeleteCrisp, tight writing. Enjoyed your six.
ReplyDeleteSweet moment. Great choice for the six.
ReplyDeleteLovely scene. I especially liked "...like a kiss near her ear." Beautifully descriptive.
ReplyDeleteLovely six. Thanks for sharing :)
ReplyDeleteI think I said this last week. If I didn't, I should have. This little exercises is a great way to work on language economy.
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