This is the next in my found poetry series, which I've been doing since the new year. I've taken it from one of my manuscripts, featuring Jocelyne, Lady Moncrieffe, the Dowager Countess of Kinnoull. It's the early 1820's near Crieff, Scotland.
Guthrie Carmichael is a Highland Scot working on her lowland estate as the gamekeeper. His decision to stop poaching from her estate requires one last delivery of game in town.
I've based Lady Moncrieffe on Canadian actress Neve Campbell. Guthrie is based on English actor Sean Bean.
You can read a previous poem about Jocelyne HERE.
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As Prisons Go
I arranged to be taken into Crieff
Meet up with my sister coming in by coach
First time in four years. Four years!
Disheartening thing - if not for Finlay’s death
Would this visit even take place?
The MacDougal resentments
Only stretched so far, thank Heaven
Whom did I see seated across the square
But the gamekeeper, Carmichael
Soldier stopped before him
Gaze traveled up to the red jacket
Before he had a chance to blink
One of those booted feet kicked
The pipe from Carmichael’s mouth
Scarred hand reached down
Took up the sacks. Carmichael
Kept his gaze trained on the soldier
“What would this be? Eh?
You wouldn’t be the lord of these parts, now?”
Carmichael neither moved nor spoke
Soldier lifted grouse from sack
Dropped the rest into the dust
Dangled bird from taloned feet
Too close to Carmichael’s face
“Name!” the soldier barked
Black boot planted on Carmichael’s hand
“Stop! Stop, I beg you! What is going on here?
Let him be!” Pulled at red-jacketed arm
Sergeant shook me off angrily
Until he saw who it was
Guthrie snatched hand to chest
Soldier saluted sharply
“This man is poaching from the estate.
I’ve apprehended him for you.”
I recalled these very sacks
Fixed to the back of the gamekeeper's saddle
That morning after the storm
That morning when he'd found me
Wet, bedraggled, desperate
Had seen me safely home
I'd sleepwalked but
He'd found me
Found me with these sacks
Fixed to the back of his saddle
Carmichael hung his head
Cradled his hand
I stared at his crumpled hat
Lying in the dust
“You have made a rather unfortunate error, Sergeant.
This man is my gamekeeper.”
Carmichael looked up
Soldier’s bravado paled
“Can you stand, Mr. Carmichael?”
I extended my hand to him
“Don’t be too concerned, Milady.”
Carmichael's voice so ragged
“Where is your regiment stationed
Sergeant?" I asked
"I should like to have a word
With your commanding officer.”
Soldier colored till his face
Was indistinguishable from
Scarlet fullcloth of jacket
Bead of sweat trickled its way
From under black-plumed bonnet
Down his rough-skinned jawline
It vanished in the gap between
Neck and stiff white collar choking throat
“May I speak to you privately, Ma’am?”
“By all means, Sergeant.”
We stepped aside, walked a few paces
Along the wall. Stopped
Bent our heads together
In rapt discussion for some minutes
Soldier broke away abruptly
As though he’d been stung
He saluted, then moped from the square
I turned toward the carriage
Carmichael helped me up the step
My sister waiting for me
Carmichael withdrew his hand
Cradling his sore one
“You had better get in,” I said
“You have been injured, after all.”
He nodded toward his horse
Waiting patiently across the square
“Then be quick about your business.
Make a point of stopping at the castle
When you return."
He opened and closed his mouth
Like a fish in the grass
He nodded his assent. His hand
Moved up to tug at hat that wasn’t there
His fingers hung suspended in midair
For an awkward moment
Then ran through his hair
“Drive on, Willis,” I called out
Old man clucked to the horses
Carriage lurched forward
Carmichael stepped out of the way
Before wheels ran over his toes
I stood, my back to him
In the pale green drawing room
“Thank you for coming,” I said
“Your servant, Ma’am,” he answered
Bowing slightly
“Are you?”
“I am.”
I broke from where I stood
Moving slowly round the edges of the room
“I would question your definition
Of ‘servant’, Mr. Carmichael.
You have been using my late husband
And me to suit your own purposes.”
“Ma’am?” he croaked
I halted, turned and faced him
“If you were poaching that morning
After the storm...why
Did you come to my aid?”
Carmichael spluttered
As if he’d swallowed a
Gulp of water down the wrong pipe
“I couldn't very well leave you out there!”
“Another man might have done just that.
Well, we are in a fine pickle, are we not?”
“Aye, Milady. We are, that.”
“You should be turned over to
The magistrate, and have done with you."
He returned my gaze, giving himself over to me.
I shuddered
“Why did ye tell that lie for me?”
He asked
“Laird Moncrieffe - he would have
Had me in gaol by now, sure.”
“Perhaps. The man who fancies himself
The new lord of Kinnoull
Would be even more severe than that.
Think hard, now, and consider carefully
What I am going to offer you.
I once offered you a room here
To recuperate from your wounds
But you refused. I’m afraid I must
Make that offer again
And I beg you to accept this time.
I have need of your cottage.
As prisons go, I hope you’ll find
This one to be exceptional.
I, myself, have always considered this
To be a home.
Mr. Carmichael, I possess information
You would prefer me not to pass along.
You likewise hold secrets of mine.
‘Men do not despise a thief
If he steals to satisfy his soul
When he is hungry.'"
He looked as if he'd just
Dashed the contents of an upset stomach
Extending my right hand, I said
“I believe we must shake on it.”
Carmichael rallied
Taking my hand in his
After one shake for form’s sake
We let go with expediency
“I’ll ring for Kearney,” I said
Picking up the bell to shake it furiously
- Julia Smith, 2009
Sweet Talking Guy says The pictures add a little extra chemistry.
Anthony North says Quite a saga being enacted here.
Shelley Munro says Sean Bean is one of my favorites. Excellent inspiration. :)
Sunday, April 19, 2009
Poetry Train Monday - 97 - As Prisons Go
Posted by Julia Phillips Smith at 3:44 PM
Labels: As Prisons Go, Found poetry, Guthrie Carmichael, Jocelyne, Neve Campbell, Poetry Train, Sean Bean
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8 comments:
exciting stuff! I think I know where this is leading - the pictures add a little extra chemistry too.
Quite a saga being enacted here.
Another great job, Julia. Sean Bean is one of my favorites. Excellent inspiration. :)
Great stuff!
More! More!
Cool!
Hey I posted new pics on my photoblog: http://mumbainagari.blogspot.com
Sweet Talking Guy - I'm glad you like the pictures. They really help my whole writing zone thing.
Anthony North - The WIP is a 400-pager.
Shelley - Love Sean Bean! Just love him!
Mike - Thanks!
Susan - That means a lot, you know. (hug)
Nikki - I'm heading right over.
Your poetry reads like a saga! Loved it!
out of that fertile mind
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