I've been working on two stories this weekend, my vampire story and my convict gardener story. Since one of the supporting characters has been on my mind a lot, here is an American sentence from his point of view.
Mr. Bent is a settler on Van Diemen's Land in the mid-1840's. When he hears that Robbie once worked as a gardener at an English country house, he takes Robbie off the road party to work as a convict laborer on his farm.
I always cast my characters, and Bent is based on English actor Ray Winstone.
Neck cloth soaks with sweat, but hides the scar from the iron one I once wore.
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Ms. Snarky Pants says Sounds interesting!
Apprentice Writer says The close-up of the neck chain is very stark. Makes me think of the road crews in 'O Brother Where Art Thou' and what a horrendous life it was to be part of.
Yousei Hime says I agree that the sentence communicates more than just facts. It says something of the man. Thanks for sharing your sentence and a bit of the story behind it.