Sunday, July 18, 2010

Poetry Train Monday - 161 - The Snags of Life



Having spent wonderful hours in the yard this weekend, and looking forward to more on my time off this week, here's a Loop Poem inspired by my garden.

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The Snags of Life

Standing in the garden
Garden opened wide
Wide enough for all
All to step inside

Treasures peek from corners
Corners beckon sweetly
Sweetly spiced and tempting
Tempting me completely

Shadows cool and knowing
Knowing boughs that wave
Waves of color flicked by breezes
Breezes gather seeds to save

Garden beckons, gathers
Gathers butterfly and bird
Bird takes refuge here
Here the snags of life are cured

© Julia Smith, 2010

Naquillity says Very nice loop poem. Your garden pic is great.

Mimi says I've never come across a loop poem before (sheltered life??) There is a sense of forward movement all the way through, driven by the loop system.

Jennie Marsland says I've never seen a loop poem before either, at least not one labeled as such. Beautiful!

10 comments:

Naquillity said...

very nice loop poem. your garden pic is great. i'll bet you'll be found in your garden this week, won't you? have a great night.

Mimi said...

I've never come across a loop poem before (sheltered life??, need to read more), but this is lovely.
There is a sense of forward movement all the way through, driven by the loop system.
Thanks for sharing it.

Jennie Marsland said...

I've never seen a loop poem before either, at least not one labeled as such. Beautiful!

Akelamalu said...

Lovely poem Julia. :)

Felicity said...

I feel so peaceful just reading that. :)

Systematic Weasel said...

Very well written! A peaceful read!

-Weasel

Travis Cody said...

That had a wonderful rhythm and tempo. I enjoyed it.

(And I rode for the first time too.)

Stan Ski said...

Good stuff - enjoy your week off.

Jingle said...

fun way of doing it,
loved the loop and cheers!

Cate Masters said...

How wonderful. Your poem had a strangely calming effect. Thanks, I needed that.