Sunday, February 5, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday - 2






Writers are encouraged to post six sentences from a work-in-progress or published piece. Sign into the Linky at Six Sentence Sunday, and visit other SSS participants.

Last week we were introduced to Dark Ages Welsh warrior Peredur, the hero of my debut vampire novel, SAINT SANGUINUS.

This week we meet Tanwen, the woman whose name was on his lips as he lay wounded on the battlefield.

After the wise woman purchases a ring from a peddler, her son Cavan returns the ring to Tanwen. Everyone in the village knows it belonged to Peredur.

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New tears began.

“I can’t,” she said.

Cavan pressed his mouth like a kiss near her ear. “Yes, you can,” he whispered.

Tanwen squeezed the ring in her hand until the edges bit. She took a deep breath, nodded and covered the rest of the space between herself and her home.

11 comments:

Cate Masters said...

Tender and poignant moment. Well done, Julia.

Ranae Rose said...

An emotionally tense six. Nice. :)

Dee Carney said...

Very touching. Nice six!

Cate Masters said...

Hey Julia, just wanted to let you know the TBR blurb fest runs through tonight, so you're welcome to post! The next one's 2/19, for Romance. Thanks for participating!

Angela Quarles said...

poignant scene!

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

Ah, what a sad six.

Cara Bristol said...

Crisp, tight writing. Enjoyed your six.

Heather Boyd said...

Sweet moment. Great choice for the six.

Sandy Nachlinger said...

Lovely scene. I especially liked "...like a kiss near her ear." Beautifully descriptive.

Wendy said...

Lovely six. Thanks for sharing :)

Travis Cody said...

I think I said this last week. If I didn't, I should have. This little exercises is a great way to work on language economy.