Sunday, August 17, 2008

Poetry Train Monday - 62 - I Can’t Be Your Captive If I Give Myself To You

Here is a second backstory poem about my latest character, Scorpius. I've been writing about him all weekend, so I did up a poem that delves deeper into his psyche. Scorpius is Chamberlain of the Keep for Lady Elysande, in a fantasy world that combines medieval society with technology. You can read the previous backstory poem and catch up on excerpt 1 and excerpt 2. I've modelled Scorpius after English actor Richard Armitage.

I Can’t Be Your Captive If I Give Myself To You

My tunic covers scars upon both wrists
Their silent witness to the blows I bore
I pulled and writhed but he would not desist
Until I would have crumpled to the floor

The manacles prevented my escape
They also meant I somehow kept my feet
The manacles preserved my pride from japes
Which never pulled the screams as when he beat

My tunic covers scars that she’s now seen
My lady with her cuffs chained to her bed
Her fingers lock me into place, between
Two posts, my clothing gone – those words I said

I hand myself to her, to be her slave
Surrender is my only hope...or grave...

Copyright - Julia Smith – Aug. 17, 2008


Anonymous said...

I loved the title! One great write, this!

plunging in the tunneled abyss

Amy Ruttan said...

Excellent Julia.

I love the idea of the medievil aspects with new science and technology.

Anonymous said...

You had me until the end. Having been through such a horrific experience while manacled, it would take complete and utter trust for him to allow her to cuff him. I just didn't get that from the last line. Other than that, fantastic!

Heather D said...

Medieval,technology and the Character Scorpius all Fascinatingly. Great Poem.

Annette Gallant said...

I love the title, and the poem itself is powerful. Well done!

Thomma Lyn said...

Ooh, nice! Scorpius is such an intriguing character, and I can tell you're having a great time with him! :)

Julia Phillips Smith said...

Missy - I took another look at the last line and gave it a different twist.